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Joni Ramos
Joni Ramos
Philippines, Manila

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Shrinking Sun

Tied to a buoy of familiarity
my usual dock
yesterday, tomorrow again

is it your eyes that promised
my return, not just
ordinary pupils that stared
Into an open sea; something about
those little wrinkles the cringed around
your peering iris
as you smiled before
the rising sun,
a footnote to a chapter

it was then I remembered
your soft familiar touch, fingerprints
that unfolded my memory

you watch me leave,
skipping pages, fast-forward
in time
I enter another journal
of your unmet calendar

the sun had time to shrink
but not before
our chapter has ended

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mitra Comment by: mitra - 2007-11-28 19:26
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Something very serene to this. What a way to start the day. :)

Great work Joni!
fredav Comment by: fredav - 2007-11-27 04:14
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Man Joni! This got me. I love how you used the journal to symbolize the memories. This is just an awesome read. Shelving this. I can read this again and again. We really need to meet up over a glass or two of red and just read poetry. Lol.

-F
OilsandSyntax Comment by: OilsandSyntax - 2007-11-26 20:48
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I like this...particularly the first three lines."tied to a buoy of familiarity my usual dock yesterday, tomorrow again"

I enjoy the "footnote to a chapter", "another journal...", and "not before our chapter has ended."

This is a nice piece. Good job.
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