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Comment by: mootiy - 2008-01-01 13:20
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| This is really god, enjoyed reading it much, love the flow. |
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Comment by: mitra - 2007-12-17 18:42
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| Excellent work. The mood and rythm is gradual and appropriate. I like the way the beat changed a little in the first line of the last stanza; it makes the ending that much unexpected. Your choice of words is always interesting. |
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The flow of words flowed in this piece... A reoccurring notion in society... I have alot of friends in the serve and protect field... I hear the stories almost weekly of domestic violence...
Glen Yumang Manese |
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Comment by: Cherley - 2007-11-28 15:31
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| Domestic Violence is a big problem and it's true that sometimes women wait too long before they leave and they do leave in a white box. Thanks for being aware of this problem and writing about it. |
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Comment by: hx - 2007-11-28 13:04
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| Very impactful. Quite lyrical for all that. Excellent work. |
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