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TuckerWhite
TuckerWhite
United States, CA

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Mother's Prey

Confused innocence between my legs,
my hairless dick pulsing, arched

For the vile unknown.

A victim of

Lurking mascara'ed eyes,
painted red lips, perverted desire.
long manicured nails, scraping at my virginity.

My broken home nightmares cease next door,
I relish in her nuclear dream of shared

Meals and affectionate display, when
she "knows" a game.

Wetness slides over me, robbing

my cradle, devouring my genes.
In a terrified panic, pushing her off,

I scream, "Stop it, get off, get off, I feel like I have to pee!"

I AM,
A Mother's prey.

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Comment by: - 2006-02-20 03:53
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My broken home nightmares cease next door/ I relish in her nuclear dream of shared /Meals and affectionate display/ when
She "knows" a game. For me this was the best part of the poem, the way you broke it up and it still made sense.
I believe subjects like this don't need fancy words or strange metaphors to bring the point across. You done it so well.
Brandywine Comment by: Brandywine - 2006-02-15 20:15
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I read this the first time you posted and I was so shocked and overwhelmed from your first posting that I couldn't find the words to post a suitable comment. It has been in my head since. This new posting with the editing is just as incredibly shocking, you have a wonderful talent here, I find your writing to be so raw and unaffected by the lure of abusing descriptive words that so many well meaning writers fall prey to. Keep it up, you're a true talent to watch for.
mickeyp Comment by: mickeyp - 2006-02-15 14:53
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A damn serious edit! I agree with everyone thus far: the images and the frustration and the overwhelming honesty are unbearably poetic. I think this is one of the best compositions I've seen from you so far. Keep writing for the sake of us all!
YeOldeFart Comment by: YeOldeFart - 2006-02-15 14:02
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Man, I'm crying. For you, for me, for a memory. Been there done that. Fifty-five years ago... Friend's mother. It's still like yesterday. Never could talk about it. You're courageous to write this. And they think only little girls get molested?
Scrapping at my virginity... nice line, but did you want scraping? Two different words.
Suggested: Change pervert's desire to perverted desire?
Great poem. You expressed your pain and indignation well.
hulshizer Comment by: hulshizer - 2006-02-15 12:42
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excellent presentation of a grim tale
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