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Birds at the Bon Odori Festival
August delivers a fresh sun and sky as the four of us prance in cotton, hand-me-down kimonos. Our flat, round fans chop the air in jagged choreography. We can’t feel our clumsiness until after the dance when we sit at the edge of the grass, outside the temple, to watch our older sisters, and then our mothers, perform the dance with small, restrained movements, humble grace. The silk fan spreads like a monarch’s wings, curves coyly in front of the body, eyes cast down. The head turns shyly toward the shoulder, and the fan lifts in time to shield the telltale tracings of a smile. We are as silent as the men. But, being young, our attention flickers back to the summer day, the swollen sun and breathless sky where we see flocks of birds, in turn, rise from a single oak tree to sweep and carve the air before lighting on limbs to view the next flock. For the first time, we become aware of chirping as the birds observe each other practicing maneuvers, preparing for their autumn flight. The shadows of birds flutter over grass. They dance with shadows of our mothers’ fans, and we practice with our own crude fans, we four girls, perched as we are on the edge.
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Really a powerful bit of writing with a subtle mystical quality hinting at a meaning and purpose to everything.
So when are you going to post something else? You're starting to accumulate a fan club. |
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| Thanks for your generous comments, Rosie! The Bon Odori Festival is a Buddhist festival that takes place in August. This poem is based on a memory I have of attending the festival with my sister and two friends of ours, also girls, whose family went to the temple. We took fan dance classes for weeks leading up to the festival, but the older girls and women were far more graceful and beautiful. While we watched, we noticed thousands of birds in the nearby trees. Hundreds at a time would take flight in perfect formation, then light on the trees while more birds took their turn. Wasn't I lucky that nature provided this gorgeous correlation with the dances below? |
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This is beautiful, Jill - I held my breath as I read it!
I loved the girls realising their own awkwardness when they watched the more experienced siblings/mothers. And the parallel with the birds. It's all lovely!
My favourite bits: 'like a monarch's wings', 'We are as silent as the men', 'the swollen sun and breathless sky', 'sweep and carve the air', and 'perched as we are on the edge', which says so much with so few words.
In fact, I might as well copy and paste the whole thing in here!
Wouldn't change a word.
So now tell me: what is the Bon Odori Festival? |
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