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wizzer
geordie carew
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The Sunray Skirt

Guddling about in a frock shop, filling in time until the girl had finished sport. Mind drifting, along the lines of what to have for dinner.
Mid sigh I saw it! Peeking out from dowdy ranks of drabness, a sunray skirt! Finally a sunray skirt beaming at me.
Trying it on I didn’t see the middle aged woman I had become. I didn’t see where my spreading hips flattened the corrugation of the pleats. I saw, I felt, sparkling twirling floating diamonds catching the light from a mirrored disco ball, no cut the disco ball wrong era, back to the breathy sounds of Marilyn singing happy birthday Mr President, standing over air vents from a rumbling subway as I danced, as I danced, as I danced…
“Are you alright in there?”
“ Yes! I’ll take it!”

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Dakota Comment by: Dakota - 2008-02-09 08:11
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Really up lifting and telling. I so enjoyed this. It's nice to read something other than mining the love seam, or the bleak take, or loss (all of which I love) and walk into the sunshine with your words...x
wizzer Comment by: wizzer Online- 2007-12-08 18:58
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oh dear i don't understand the word drabble
thankyou for your comments. too many words? i shall be there with a scalpel!
xxx geordie
Ash19640 Comment by: Ash19640 - 2007-12-08 18:49
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Aw, this was a sad one, although it ends on an 'up' note which is why I like it: evocative piece of flash-fiction-- there'd be a great 'drabble' in this if you edited it a little. Ash :)
nadinesellers Comment by: nadinesellers - 2007-11-30 21:55
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geordie, you have managed to twist the sadness of loss and glorified the universal acceptance of age. you wrung the subject very nicely with the last line. bringing womanhood to its original glory.
JenaGalifany Comment by: JenaGalifany - 2007-11-30 05:03
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Cute little piece of fluff. It brought a smile to my face. Thanks for sharing.
Jena
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