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lollipopRob
Robin Michelle Zachery
United States, KY., Middlesboro

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Fire Inside

A long look into your eyes.
A longer look you give to me.
Sudden urges of passion stir,
I know exactly what you need.
Sweet touches, so soft,
feathery and warm.
Loosing touch with reality,
Into a majestic storm.
Swirls of heat swarming in,
tickles all of my insides.
A fire made of steel,
probes the center of my mind.
I beg to not need it.
the passion and deep desire.
With you, I am so satisfied,
Without you, I want to die.
The melting warmth we've become,
is easily undone..
Until the long looks between our eyes,
again become as one.

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lollipopRob Comment by: lollipopRob - 2007-12-15 00:10
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Thanks Poetguyraza
This is to my hubby. It seems that we only connect good when we have sex. Once it's over, "the melting warmth we've become is easily undone." means that all of the closeness that we just shared will probably turn cold "until the long looks between our eyes again become as one." It was a sexual build up and in the middle while experiencing a climax, I don't want it because I know when it's finished we will become colder...until...I guess you have to be me to understand and I have to be you to see what you mean. I hope the explanation helped a little.
poetguyraza Comment by: poetguyraza - 2007-12-14 23:51
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Nicely written but I can't put my finger on it the poem just ended in the middle the ending isn't proper you jumped from the middle to the conclusion try extending your poems longer it would make better sense to the reader
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