 |
 |
 |
| |
The Truth of Trees
Oh greedy tree that steals our sky
Shading sun from human eye
Sullen in its verdant glen
To heat the harth and home of men
Roots like snakes suck on our soil
Foiled not, by steel or stone
Great sentinels in our fields they stand
Behold the dark mysteries of man alone
Every ring a lonely sigh
Whilst slumber bats and Ravens cry
Bees will tarry whilst cities crumble
Mistletoe and Ivy fumble
To know the truth of trees
Want to comment on this Poetry?
Sign up to Edit Red and you will be able to comment on Poetry and get access to: Upload your own stories and poems, get readers and their feedback, promote your work...
|
 |
|
[Back to top]
|
|
 |
Comment by: Dakota - 2007-12-04 13:02
|
|
I love trees - always have. They have that ancient quality - plus they are homes to so many other earthlings - in need of sanctuary, sadly mostly from us. I love old language - I also think it can give an almost futuristic quality. I think many of the ancients were so much more civilzed than we are now, but many might find that debateable.
Rhyming is so hard I think - so much of it seems forced to me. I don't understand a lot of the technicalities either - so I write and hope for the best. One of my favorite writers is a singer-sonwriter, Damien Rice. I love how his words work.
Thank you for taking the time to write your thoughts. |
|
|
First of all, I really love the title of this. It made me zero right in on it from your list of downloads and want to see what it was about.
You write about something here that I have thought about many times -- what things some of the ancient trees out there in the world have seen and lived through. I like the way this rhymes. I don't see rhyme used much in poetry anymore, but I'm always delighted when I do. It gives this an old world feel in keeping with the theme. |
|
Comment by: Dakota - 2007-12-04 09:39
|
|
| Thank you so much... lost for words...x |
 |
Comment by: larciero Online- 2007-12-04 09:23
|
|
Normally, I will be honest, I loathe poetry that rhymes. But the rhythm and the message in this poem are gorgeous. It has just a old, classic type of feel to it. The language you use makes the rhyming necessary and therefore the rhyming is smooth. There is not a stitch of forcefulness behind the rhyming.
I thank you for showing me that rhyming poems can be wonderful. Really, really love the feel from this poem the first stanza is so perfect. It threw me for a loop. I adored it. |
|
Comment by: Dakota - 2007-12-04 09:09
|
|
Hi Dicomposition - yeah - the internet is where my quill scratched...my desktop is the painting by J.W Waterhouse, 'Miranda, The Tempest'...
A contemporary Romantic for sure, although I'd never concieved it as that before. Feelings, senses, Love and understanding relationships is always in there. A penchant for wallowing...
Yes, OpaqueOne I think, like most of this planet - we take for granted |
| 1 2 3 4 Next |
|
 |
|
 |
|
|
