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What they did do
Stars at night
I watch
Stare
They shine
I wonder
Slowly at first
Did they do this all the time?
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| thanks larciero, tequila, delirium, and bebe, sorry it took me so long to recipicate, i appreciate you all taking the time to give this short piece a read, it used to be much longer but the point to me was easier to say with fewer words than i originally wrote, so this is the final outcome. im glad you enjoyed this, i guess thats part of the reason i write, because i love the feeling writing gives others when they read something ive written, as i have been inspired over the years to dream and see the world through the eyes of my favorite writers i some day want to invoke those same sensations in others. i hope you all have continued success with your own works, if you ever want to chat send me a message, i might not get back to you expediately, but i will get back to you. best of wishes. Patrick. |
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| You make me want to go star gazing....I love the whimsical feeling it gives me. Thanks, Bebe |
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| they are very short and to the point which can be good in some cases. the sense of wondering added a little adolecent innocence to the piece. great job! |
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| This, along with The Rain poem, are nicely done teeny insights into your thoughts. Allows the reader to feel that moment which everyone has when wonderment suprises your thoughts. Nice. |
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Comment by: larciero Online- 2007-12-04 12:56
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| I liked this short and a touch of bewilderment. The last line is perfect. |
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