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Meleina Backhaus
United States, MT, Missoula

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The Penny Dropped

He knew it was a hat; absolutely, unequivocally, undoubtedly it was a hat. What he couldn’t figure out was why it was such a hard hat. Why there was that little point to it and why it had a funny, bumpy brim that went all the way around the edges and why it was darker. He turned it around in his fingers, wondering. In the silence he heard the scrabble of tiny feet and that peculiar gurgling, clicking sound of mischief makers escaping; and finally the penny dropped and he knew the truth.

Henry definitely had a Goblin infestation.

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phillmag Comment by: phillmag Online- 2007-12-23 11:47
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The opening sentence was enticing. It invited me immediately. Being a lover of ambiquity, i really liked the story. Short and mischievous
karjon Comment by: karjon - 2007-12-09 12:54
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You know, we had the title 'Odd' for a previous challenge,and this would have fit beautifully. An odd wee tale that made me smile.

'...a Goblin infestation' - what a wonderful idea.

Thanks for the read and the smiles.

Cheers

Karen
waxseal Comment by: waxseal - 2007-12-07 20:12
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Thanks all - the hat is an acorn :-)
citydweller Comment by: citydweller - 2007-12-07 07:23
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Hello, Meleina~

I agree with Anna; this is a very well-constructed piece and a pleasure to read. One picky crit: I'd lowercase the "G" in "goblin." I am curious about this hat as well...

A very nice piece!

~J.
rollingbolus Comment by: rollingbolus - 2007-12-07 00:53
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This is a weird, funny little story. Nice images of gurgling goblins scampering away from their mischief. Good one.
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