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Mothers
MOTHERS ARE A GIFT FROM GOD
RAISING AND TEACHING OUR CHILDREN
DESERVES AN APPLAUSE
WE INSTILL IN THEM LOVE, HONESTY, DISCIPLINE, AND TRUST
LETTING THEM KNOW WORSHIPPING GOD IS A MUST
MOTHERS ARE OUR FIRST TEACHERS WHEN WE COME TO EARTH, THEY COMFORT US AND TEACH US OUR WORTH
A MOTHER'S LOVE IS LIKE GOLD, IT HAS SO MUCH VALUE AND HEALS OUR SOUL
ALL PRAISE IS DUE TO THE CREATOR FOR HIS CREATION
STRONG MOTHERS ARE WHAT BUILD A NATION
COPYRIGHT 2004-2007
CASSANDRA MUHAMMAD
AUTHOR OF POETRY WITH A PASSION!
http://www.trafford.com/robots/04-1918.html
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Comment by: - 2008-10-16 17:59
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I vant your bodty.
I vant your blot.
I vant you!
COUNY DRECULA!! |
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Comment by: kc0003 - 2008-09-02 01:51
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| this is a nice tribute...well done |
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Comment by: Afrka - 2007-12-07 03:19
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| Thanks for sharing this wonderful write and it is a wonderful tribute to Mothers of all races. Keep writing the way you do. I like your style. Thanks for sharing this piece with us! Stay blessed |
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Comment by: Passion - 2007-12-05 05:54
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Thank you for your feedback. I don't think it is preachy.
It is a tribute poem for all mothers
regardless if they are religious or not. It is not about religion. I am spiritual and
I live outside of the box. Just because my last name
is Muhammad doesn't mean I'm religious.
I believe in the Universal Laws and
I don't have to be careful about what I write because people
don't have to read it. As far as the
all caps, that is what I was in the mood for, lol.
Have a great and prosperous day!
P.S. Sounds like you
were preaching more than you claim I was.
Take care,
Passion
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Comment by: larciero Online- 2007-12-04 12:33
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Mother poems are wonderful but for me this is a little preachy. I am not religious and I support people who enjoy their religions but the last line implies religion within the nation. Be careful of the ideas you are putting forth with your poetry.
I don't feel poetry has to rhyme but that doesn't mean it shouldn't. I did enjoy your line "A MOTHER'S LOVE IS LIKE GOLD, IT HAS SO MUCH VALUE AND HEALS OUR SOUL." But you might want to think about breaking it up into two lines.
You also might want to lose the ALL CAPS. |
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