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"Shadow"

'Shadow'

Running threw the hallways
In total darkness.
The sweat pouring
Down my face
Pooling into my eyes.
Making them scream
With pain.

I see a shadow
Mimicking my
Every movement.
It seeps from
Wall to wall
With each progressive
Step I take.

I continue running as fast
As my legs will bare.
With each corner turned
I glance over my shoulder
For that haunting shadow
That could easily pray
Upon me at any moment.

The fatigue setting in
My feet slowing
To a horrifying walk.
Once again I find myself glancing
Behind be to find nothing there but
Silence and darkness.

My heart is beating so rapidly
I can feel the pulsation
In my ears
Impairing my cense of hearing.

The exhaustion consumes me
Bringing me
Upon my hands and knees.
I feel a frightening vibration
Threw the floor
And yet I can still hardly see
Anything threw this ticking darkness.

Suddenly I'm seeing a shadow
Lurking there in the darkness
Hunting me with
Every turn I make into each corridor.

Running now for what seems days
Has now ceased
So and abrupt ending
Due to the extreme fatigue I've endured.
There is was
I could barely focus
Upon it in the pitch black darkness
That surrounds me.
The shadow finally
Has me cornered
I could no longer run and elude
This unforgiving shadow.
The shadow has won.

Kristopher T. Warren

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Machelle815 Comment by: Machelle815 - 2007-05-22 10:32
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This one is great. A little lengthy but it still shows your talent.
Comment by: - 2006-04-20 11:39
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Like the poem and I also can relate. Believe it could have been said with a few less words.
Min Comment by: Min - 2006-03-06 12:24
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Felt the same as others. You diluted the impact of a very powerful image of someone trying to escape and being cornered. I'd like to see this again, if you ever shorten it. I would also like to see you proofread it. Did you mean to have 'ticking' darkness?
hulshizer Comment by: hulshizer - 2006-02-17 12:00
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It sounds as though you are running from either your past or some inner demon. I also feel as though it could be a bit shorter and still preserve the message.
tootwitchy Comment by: tootwitchy - 2006-02-16 22:01
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I think this poem is awesome; I relate. I enjoy your work.
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