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| This one is great. A little lengthy but it still shows your talent. |
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Comment by: - 2006-04-20 11:39
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| Like the poem and I also can relate. Believe it could have been said with a few less words. |
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Comment by: Min - 2006-03-06 12:24
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| Felt the same as others. You diluted the impact of a very powerful image of someone trying to escape and being cornered. I'd like to see this again, if you ever shorten it. I would also like to see you proofread it. Did you mean to have 'ticking' darkness? |
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| It sounds as though you are running from either your past or some inner demon. I also feel as though it could be a bit shorter and still preserve the message. |
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| I think this poem is awesome; I relate. I enjoy your work. |
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"We The People"
After dozens of cities are destroyed by nuclear bombs, a group calling itself 'The People' issue demands.
They want the militaries of the world to disband.
The CIA has only the video demands to work with but must find the enemy quickly because governments are starting to comply.
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