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A monsters surprise
The child prepared
for her surprise;
she barricaded her door with
her strongest plastic chair.
For the surprise waiting for her was
not a surprise;
but a scare.
She could not say the truth;
or tell his dare,
instead she would sit;
stare and beware.
He kept forcing his surprises,
making her life a misery.
"It's a game" he would say;
"It's love, not hate".
The monster that visited her bedroom
brought a thunderous silence to her face;
as she begged with her eyes
and pleaded with her thoughts,
but daren't open her lips and let her soul escape.
But the monster didn't look at her face;
he took no pity in his own
terrible disgrace.
He carried on with his evil deed;
and planted his disgusting seed.
After the last surprise the fragile
child broke,
then went to her mother and spoke of the monster's doings.
Her mother knew and did nothing.
The broken child's pain grew stronger;
until she was released at sixteen
by the sanctuary of a knife;
the truth was a sword;
not a shield.
It didn't matter to the child anymore
as she bled to death;
and left the monster;
her abuser,
to live with his sins until he revealed the truth.
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Comment by: - 2006-04-11 23:29
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| Extremely disturbing. I find the whole idea of child sexual and physical abuse totally neausiating. Your voice in this subject is extremely vivid and beautifully done. No holds bared, no pity for the guilty. Loveley work, gripping to the end. |
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Comment by: alesha - 2006-04-10 13:12
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i like the rhythm of the poem, or rather, the lack of. it starts out nursery rhyme-ish and then changes to narrative.
i love this stanza:
'The broken child's pain grew stronger;
until she was released at sixteen
by the sanctuary of a knife;
the truth was a sword;
not a shield.'
two words: loved it |
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Comment by: Juliet - 2006-02-18 09:06
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| The beginning of this kind of makes me think of a nursery ryhme, which works very well around the third stanza where it suddenly changes in both style and mood ..quite dark, but very affective. |
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Comment by: shaft - 2006-02-17 07:38
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I don't want to be seen as harsh even though I am :D
read all your stuff out loud! |
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Ok, will do!
Thank you!
I appreciate the truth!
Other people tend not to tell me where my stuff goes wrong! |
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