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GarethCB
Gareth Brownbill
United Kingdom, Crawley

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Dead Lucky - Wee Challenge #20

The fact that Johnny “The Mouse” Kaplinski stayed alive at all after the two biggest families on the East Coast discovered his betrayal to the Feds said something about his resourceful nature. If he hadn’t also cheated on his bookmaker, who decided enough was enough and shot him, he may even have lived to testify.

I guess we’ll never know. I do know, however, that the families would have inflicted more than a bullet through the head. The fact that he was dead before they reached him may have been the biggest stroke of luck he ever had.

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easywriter58 Comment by: easywriter58 - 2007-12-24 20:05
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I would prefer a natural death, myself-but this story has a great beginning, middle and end. Yeah, better not to suffer.
GarethCB Comment by: GarethCB - 2007-12-11 10:46
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Thanks Nora. Thanks Karen. Glad you both enjoyed it.
karjon Comment by: karjon Online- 2007-12-11 04:02
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Very good, Gareth - a lovely bit of irony.

I wanted there to be a comma after 'Feds', but that might just be me.

Thanks for the read - enjoyed this one.

Cheers

Karen
Nora Comment by: Nora - 2007-12-10 07:10
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Heck, yeah! Don't mess with the family. Two to the back of the head is a mercy killing. Good story, great pacing and lots of information in 100 words. Mob/crime syndicate stories never seem to lose their magic.
GarethCB Comment by: GarethCB - 2007-12-09 13:35
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Many thanks to everyone for your comments on this. It's really appreciated.
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