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Lana Burke
United Kingdom, Essex, Southend

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fumbling hands

decisions made by longing
undecided to surrender
the reasoning
of a needless sacrifice

this body held infront
of you, dying for your comfort
aching for fulfilment
of a love that will not give

beginnings that will not end
an end to what I want
a familiar start to a story
I would much sooner have forgot

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acradianburn Comment by: acradianburn - 2008-06-12 12:53
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well written and unique, i find myself liking the last stanza the best, especially "beginnings that will not end". good job here!
redtwinsis Comment by: redtwinsis - 2008-01-09 13:55
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well written you know it's good when your readers are longing for more :)
Apollo Comment by: Apollo Online- 2008-01-02 19:01
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okay 1st let me just say... I felt this in my soul...

2nd "beginnings that will not end" wow.

yet you give hope at the end and if you don't have faith sometimes hope is the only thing that helps us continue on...

I smiled when reading this...
poetguyraza Comment by: poetguyraza - 2007-12-14 20:33
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The end leves a mystery behind it's kinda weird actually the rest of it is amazing though
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