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From the Balcony
They huddled together to combat the cold as they waited for her cab to arrive.
“I had a great time,” she said.
“Great.” He grinned uncontrollably. “I’m sorry dinner didn’t quite work out. I thought Rachel Ray explained it well enough. That stocky, nasty-voice-havin’ bitch.”
“It’s okay,” she chuckled.
“Anyway, I’m sure my roommate will take care of it. He drank a bottle of barbecue sauce once because we bet him he wouldn’t.”
She laughed, locking her enormous blue eyes with his. He leaned in for a kiss. A warm, putrid fluid splattered on his face from the heavens. Faint heaving sounds could be heard.
A meager voice choked from above. “Dude, you’ll never get laid if you keep on feeding chicks shit like that.”
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Comment by: Juan2 - 2008-01-05 17:06
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Nice little double entendre at the end there. Makes me wonder why it's so hard for some people to get to a bathroom sometimes. I mean, the guy up there's already on the freakin' balcony, he had time to hear the conversation, I'm sure he could've gotten to the toilet in time. Oh well, inconsiderate punks. Still made me smile, though.
happy writings. |
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Comment by: - 2007-12-20 07:30
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How dates can go south in an instant, by Mitch H. What a mess! It had so many components that worked and I see this as a movie scene somewhere ... a funny one, too.
Not a crit to fire off. You did good. |
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| I didn't see that ending coming at all, and the date seemed to be going so well. Very funny. |
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Comment by: Nora - 2007-12-18 07:06
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| Oh, no! Mitch, I hope this is straight up fiction, because it sounds like it could be horrifically true. Not a crit to be had and you actually made me laugh out loud. |
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Comment by: jakrebs - 2007-12-18 06:51
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Ahhh, Hargrave you haven't written anything in quite a while. I'm glad that after such a long sabbatical this masterful work is the result.
Thoroughly disgusting, so you and very funny. |
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