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Mitchell, Lydia and Nora on COPS
Open:
Officer is walking up to situation. Two women are bickering at each other in front of a run down trailer. A man with no shirt on is sitting on the curb, holding his bloody mouth.
Officer: What seems to be the problem.
Mitchell: Well, she’s my wife and she’s my sister. Wait … that one’s my wife and that one’s my sister. Yeah …
Both ladies can be heard bickering in the background.
Officer: Sir, what happened here? Why are you bleeding?
Mitchell: Well one of them hit me in the face.
Officer: Which one?
Mitchell: Shit, I don’t know. Does it matter? They’re both bitches.
Officer: Did she knock out some teeth?
Mitchell: No. Them was already gone.
Officer: Miss? Excuse me, miss. Could you come over here and explain to me what’s going on?
Lydia: She’s comin’ over here, and she’s telling me that he told her to tell me move out. I work at the Burger King thirty-five hours a week and I pay the rent!
Nora (in background): You don’t do nothing! You don’t do nothing! Uh uh! Uh uh!
Officer: Ma’am, could you please calm down? I’ll talk to you in a second.
Lydia: He’s a dog! That man’s a dog. He cheated on me.
Officer: So you’re his wife?
Lydia: Um … no.
Officer: This is ridiculous. Ma’am, can you clear some of this up?
Nora: I’ve got five kids with this piece of shit. Okay? He tells me the other day that he cheated on me with this bitch. Okay? I’m like nuh-uh! Nuh-uh! So I hit him in the face with a bottle.
Mitchell (Stumbling over): Just take me to jail, Officer. Officer. Officer! Just take me to jail, Officer. I just want to get the Hell out of here.
Officer (disgusted by the situation): Alright. Here’s what I’m going to do. I’m going to let you all off with a warning. Just … stop hitting each other. Take the dispute inside. Maybe … you should all just spend some time apart, blow off some steam. I don’t want to have to come back here.
Mitchell: Officer …
Officer: I mean it. I don’t want to have to ever come back.
Cut to:
Shot of Officer in car, leaving the scene.
Officer: You know, there’s really not much you can do in a domestic like that. They’re crazy. They’re bickering. You’ve just got to let it play out. You know? Chalk it up to street justice.
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Comment by: Nora - 2008-02-14 22:39
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| I just read this again and ponged remedially. Repetitively. I dare say, I Dom Deluised. It gets better every time I read it. |
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Comment by: flack47 - 2008-01-13 02:28
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Karl,
Based on what you just said (the Beast especially), I'd say you were from Kansas.
You nailed it.
I actually wrote this very quickly (in about 10 minutes) and haven't edited it since. I thought it was funny and put it up. I'm glad you got a laugh from it. |
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Dude, I just happened to read this while listening to some pretty hot bluegrass. You have no idea how well the two went together. This was a riot.
With regard to the word processor: try Notepad. It's simple and too stupid to know bout proper anglish.
I could envision the ground littered with Milwaukee's Best Light (aka the Beast) and discarded car parts. Perhaps tossing in a couple kids playing on/in an old toilet settin on the front porch... |
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Ah, ha! The writers are back in their writing. I love it when that happens. I'm sure that none of you three are anything like in the story. But I may be wrong.
Mitch, I'm sure there must be some kind of fantasy thing of yours going on with Nory and Lydia, but hey, that's okay by me. Nory and Lydia don't seem to mind and we're all growed up round these parts.
Thanks for the read
Grae. |
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Comment by: Arley - 2007-12-17 20:04
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I don't know, didn't ask, want to stay in the dark lest the authorities come after me to explain this situation, BUT — I LOVED IT!! Sooooo entertaining!!!!
Lydia: She's comin' over here, and she's telling me that he told her to tell me (to) move out. I work at the Burger King thirty-five hours a week and I pay the rent! (You missed TO unless you left it out on purpose for vernacular reasons)
And Mitch, you're a gentleman in the know; offer Nora a real Woman's Drink — A Screaming Orgasm. |
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