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Rosie Sandler
Rosie Sandler
United Kingdom, Essex

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Breaking in - Challenge no. 21

I rummage in the drawer and find the Comfort Bag. I line up two Mars Bars and three Twixes. I have to eat it all in five minutes, then throw it up again.
But my dad knocks on the door.
‘Catherine, can I come in?’
I stuff the chocolate back in the drawer. ‘Sure, Dad.’
He sits next to me on the bed. ‘You don’t have to do it.’
‘Do what?’
‘The... vomiting thing. What do you do – eat, then purge?’
I can’t look at him. ‘How did you know?’
‘I’ve been reading up on it – I heard you being sick a couple of times.’
He takes me to the mirror. ‘Look at yourself, love.’
I am hugely fat.
‘You’re beautiful, Catherine. Perfect.’ He holds me. ‘Shhh, my darling. Don’t cry. We’ll get through this together. It’s going to be all right.’

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Kowalski Comment by: Kowalski - 2007-12-21 19:15
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Great story, Rosie. You have a talent with these slightly off-kilter people - yet you seem entirely normal. Maybe that's where you get your perspective.
marlinmark Comment by: marlinmark - 2007-12-20 11:36
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This was very powerful. Good piece of flash here with all that was said without saying it. Very moving, I was sad and hopeful at the same time.
wizzer Comment by: wizzer - 2007-12-19 14:51
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love this new take on the idea. wish it wasn't true to life!
great work! reads very well. no clunky areas i can see
xxx geordie
Arley Comment by: Arley - 2007-12-19 14:49
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Hey Rosie,

I see you've already jumped on Jim's "boo-boo" sighting, and I agree with his comments as well. Good Job! Hope this wasn't inspired by real life!
Rosie Sandler Comment by: Rosie Sandler - 2007-12-19 14:34
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Wow, Jim you're fast - I was still posting for ER word-counts when you posted your critique: thank you. Good to see you about, again.
I deliberated over that comma - so your comment made me go back and put it in. And I've deleted the 'you know', so that solves that one!
Thanks again, Jim.
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