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slit
Shirine Aouad
Canada, Quebec, Montreal

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filmscream

my broken bones
my selfish, selfish desires
...take me please, overwhelm me please
eat me out, take me in
squeeze my bottom and push me open
conceal my awareness in abandon
smother my understanding in instinct
and leave me panting hard, fallen
over the edge
yet guilty, satisfied
cloaked in release, only an animal

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sickSAM Comment by: sickSAM - 2008-02-11 10:57
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FILMSCREAM such a clever and fitting title for this writing. i love it. i can feel the emotion
BrianNew Comment by: BrianNew - 2008-01-14 10:07
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Very tense. Good choice to use coherent 'thesis' line at very end; excellent inclusion of phrase, 'yet guilty'; again, good choice in using sex to bear out the idea of guilt. More than anything: this poem (it IS a poem) has something to interesting say, something that we can think about -- we are very animal...and/but we are also very guilty.
David Floyd Comment by: David Floyd - 2007-12-21 09:56
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Not leaving much to the imagination there!
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