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L Baird
United States, Washington, Kent

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Red Satin Bows

I first saw her from across the room. She was holding a champagne flute and wearing a red dress. Her long hair was loosely tied back with a red ribbon tied in a bow. She turned around, saw me, and smiled. She began to walk over. I already knew what was going to happen tonight. I would take her home, we would sit and talk in front of the fire, we would start to make love, and then I would kill her. I’d use the silver knife to cut her throat, and create a ribbon to match the one in her hair in blood. I’d watch the life flow out of sapphire eyes like the blood pooling on the floor, dripping from her fingertips. She was walking towards her death, and she had no idea.

“Hello” she said. Her dress was satin.

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rdferguson Comment by: rdferguson - 2008-01-03 00:14
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i like this. a lot. as it is, there is nothing i would change.
wizzer Comment by: wizzer - 2007-12-28 15:05
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enjoyed this! not at all expected! xxxgeordie
karjon Comment by: karjon Online- 2007-12-28 11:14
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Very good, Lupa - I like the picture you create as the poor girl walks towards her death.

A nicely macabre take on the challenge theme.

Cheers

Karen
DKav Comment by: DKav - 2007-12-25 16:41
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I like the fact that you don't describe the action itself, so it allows the reader to imagine that these thoughts are sexual-violent fantasies which may or may not lead into something sinister. It's definitely a great description of the dark side of the human mind that seeks to destroy what is perceived as joy and beauty. In a time of the year, where beauty, happiness and purity (angel, infant being born, saviour) are in the public consciousness, the dark side still exists. thanks for sharing!
xXLupaXx Comment by: xXLupaXx - 2007-12-23 16:18
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With so many people suggesting that i make it longer, i think i will. Expect an update soon
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