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carrie champagne
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Canada, alberta, edmonton

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The Last Present

The youngster sat cross-legged, in the semi-circle of children, at Santa's feet. He was watching the glittering mound of gifts eroding away as, one by one, they were matched with their recipients.

Miracles happened to other people and why expect that this Christmas would be any more rich in them than before? He'd been brought to this group home from the emergency shelter just last night. The priest had tried to locate his meth addicted mother all of yesterday, until evening, when over a bowl of soup, the boy had told a social worker that he didn't want to be with her anymore, anyway.

So, there wasn't going to be a gift, not that he would've got anything anyway and definitely not for a twelve year old new kid. He rationalized it was because they didn't even know he was here. He tried to feel happy for everyone else's joy in their presents.

"Bobby Jackson." The elf was looking at the pile of kids beneath the shredded wrapping paper, "Bobby?"

Santa was holding the last present from under the tree and smiling at him! "Here you go, my boy! Merry Christmas!"

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wizzer Comment by: wizzer - 2007-12-28 15:45
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gorgeous tear jerker! well done! xxx geordie
karjon Comment by: karjon - 2007-12-28 11:51
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Aw, that was sweet, Carrie. A wee bit of happiness from a terrible situation. Nicely done.

Cheers

Karen
champagne Comment by: champagne Online- 2007-12-25 17:42
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Thanks to you all. I made a couple of changes that, hopefully, create some surprise at the end and smoothed away any bits that were confusing. I hope you all had a merry day and found your miracle waiting in the kindness of others.
DKav Comment by: DKav - 2007-12-25 16:58
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This is a beautiful and uplifting story! A total delight. Thank you for sharing.
frees340 Comment by: frees340 Online- 2007-12-24 23:03
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omg. you rock my socks. this is good.
check for errors in flow, i think i saw some. other than that, its gold.
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