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Rosie Sandler
Rosie Sandler
United Kingdom, Essex

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Anniversary - first and last poetry challenge

Why am I dreaming of you again?
Ten years since I lay on your bed,
head at your feet,
grief coiling me like a spring.
Morphine fuelled your dreams –
screams and despair –
air full of your breath,
death rattling your bones,
stone-cold as the ice cubes
you couldn’t keep down.

Now, blood full of shards,
sharp grit in my eyes,
I sink again.

Ten years since I lay on your bed,
head at your feet, and heard
words that emptied me inside –
‘I know you’re killing me’.

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Ash19640 Comment by: Ash19640 - 2008-01-09 15:50
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Wow Rosie-- seriously impressed by this and given the strength of a previous work I've read of yours not surprised by your challenge win here. You've called this your 'first and last'> good on you for challenging yourself! Ash :)
KelleyRose Comment by: KelleyRose - 2008-01-09 13:46
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Congrats on the win! And I can see why it won. The flow and imagery are so beautiful. Not to mention the story. Thank you for writing this even though it was hard for you.
mynamelez Comment by: mynamelez - 2008-01-07 19:48
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A well written poem.
Like the phrases "grief coiling me like a spring" and Death rattling your bones."
Guilt nags forever.

congrads on the win.

mynamelez
Jesselise Comment by: Jesselise - 2008-01-05 13:00
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This is outstanding. It just pulled me right in and held me. I could see why this won the challege! Congratulations, it's a wonderful piece.
Rosie Sandler Comment by: Rosie Sandler - 2008-01-02 07:26
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Thanks for all your comments, Betty, Glen (no - Brit spelling has 2 ls in 'fuelled'), Bill, Cheryl and Grae! This was about my grandmother dying, which I found almost impossible to write about. Had to wrench this one out!
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