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darkbluegirl
acid chick
Romania

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Emptiness

Youth-an empty space,
No mawkish stuff
Just wild dreams,
Which make it through the night
And fade away in the day’s light.
Volcano lava flowing through my veins,
Which cools off when reaching reality.
An old mind
In a young body,
The lethal dilemma.
There’s so much to live
But I am trapped
By my own rules,
My fears.
The mirror reveals a different person
From the one I sketched in my mind.
Trying to find my way
In this bustling world,
I forgot to enjoy
What’s supposed to be
The best time of my life.


A question pops up:
Will I find it?

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kamereon Comment by: kamereon - 2008-09-05 17:42
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i really dig your work...this is perhaps, my favorite
Wildefriend Comment by: Wildefriend Online- 2008-06-15 12:35
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I like this, but you might have the section about lava end, "which cools off after bubbling to the surface."
;-)
mattarnold Comment by: mattarnold - 2008-03-29 01:52
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I especially liked this pair:
An old mind
In a young body,

and all the guitars...m
redtwinsis Comment by: redtwinsis - 2008-01-10 18:05
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Great poem I think everyone feels trapped at one point and time Well written :)
chillibeani826 Comment by: chillibeani826 - 2008-01-03 18:17
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Every teen feels this way sometime in their life, good job....
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