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draco101
Jo McKay
Japan, Sasebo

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Requiem of Lost Love

We were always there for eachother. From the beginning, you were there for me, and I was there for you. We held together against the current of time, always by eachother's side through the worst and the best, sharing all that we had to share. We were always aware of each other, yet ignorant of the other. Until that day were we took that soulful look into eachother's eyes, and saw the world.
I want you to know that I never meant for our paths to change the way it did. And I never meant to mix up that which was better still. And I did not mean to fall in love, but we did. I never knew there'd be a night were it would all change for us, but it did. And when that night came, we let go of our grip on reality, and were swept together in the current of our dreamy love.
In one fateful night, we cast aside our childhood innocence of friendship together and took the perminant step forward. And for a while, there was only you and me. The world turned a cold shoulder to us, but we only returned the gesture. And soon the world learned to stand aside when we passed by.
And now I sit here alone. The same current of love that we had held so dearly together in now tore us apart, sending us tossing and turning in a malestrom of loneliness. I never meant to hurt you. The wounds we caused each other are too deep to heal alone. I feel your loving embrace around me, but I know that it is only an illusion of the heart. I am falling, falling deeper into the sea of loneliness. I loose myself in my despair. Myself. Just me. Alone.
I miss you.

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foxportions549 Comment by: foxportions549 - 2008-04-20 16:29
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I loved the last sentence. "I miss you..." With the description and emphasis of his loneliness, the last sentence really tied it up together.

The idea of passing the world the cold shoulder...very nice!
Overall, great story!
Myk Malice Comment by: Myk Malice - 2008-01-07 09:50
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i like the way you didn't space between each and other it gave an image of closeness to the characters.
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