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Rosie Sandler
Rosie Sandler
United Kingdom, Essex

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Escape to the Country-poetry challenge 1st rhymes

Six dead pigeons are wrenched from my chimney,
Still-feathered carcasses dreaming of flight.
Sticks of bone, beak and claw, they eyeball me,
Till the chimney sweep takes the sack outside.

“Your husband’ll want to see them,” he says,
Then leaves the bag open to curious eyes,
Sure passers-by will suffer no distress
When they see its mouth, gaping in surprise.

But my husband hates all corpses, as do I:
Rum, city folk, we never count our dead –
Shut eyes instead, as bells begin to chime;
Come indoors, to shudder in sightless beds.

And so it is that we are now marooned, within this “rural idyll”, holding fast
Sands that run for us and leave us dry, surrounded by cadavers from our past.

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Rosie Sandler Comment by: Rosie Sandler - 2008-02-14 12:41
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Bill: have you really never seen this one before? Bet you've commented and forgotten - maybe you're such a critic-less fan that you praise my work now without reading it!

But thank you for your unswerving loyalty and support, mate. Much appreciated.
Kowalski Comment by: Kowalski - 2008-02-13 19:08
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Fascinated me, start to finish. I've just realized I've made the transition from legitimate critic to non-critical fan. You've ruined me.

Worse than I was already ruined, I mean.

Bill
Rosie Sandler Comment by: Rosie Sandler - 2008-01-15 11:30
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Thank you, nice people!

Grae: what a horrible thing, to have to remove dead birds. Poor you. And your poetry is very good - we just have different styles, mate! YOu're far better than me at the proper, traditional stuff.
Audiogeist Comment by: Audiogeist - 2008-01-15 04:03
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Intriguing opener, a telling ending 'surrounded by cadavers from our past.' It hits a nerve. :)

I loved this Rosie - for its sound rhyme and meter; most for its unique story.
alien Comment by: alien - 2008-01-15 02:55
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Much bette. Much, much better.

You're a clever poet and I always know that it will be a good read when I click on some of your work. It's a well crafted poem. Well done, Rosie. :)
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