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Comment by: wizzer - 2008-01-11 16:44
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can just picture him squeezed into his comfy chair
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Comment by: - 2008-01-10 22:43
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| Kristen, well done in the placement of the beer cans in scene with the boy. A not-in-your-face tale, yet it says so much in such a short piece. I liked this. |
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| Yes, Karen, using 'had broke' vs the more correct 'had broken' was to add to the atmosphere of the piece. I'm a big fan of Jeff Foxworthy and his redneck jokes - this is sort of an homage to the genre. :) |
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Comment by: karjon - 2008-01-10 06:28
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Ah, all those beer cans that say more about this man, this family, than anything else - very good, Kirsten.
Just one thing (isn't there always?), was 'had broke' instead of 'had broken' deliberate for idiomatic effect? Just curious.
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Comment by: Arley - 2008-01-09 09:31
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| Well now, Kirsten, you can't blame Ernie for having his priorities in order can you? Good job capturing what usually goes down in domestica, heh heh. |
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