Speed Demon - Challenge 22
He whirls past in a blur of fast-forward motion. I want to press Pause, to breathe – to tell my son to breathe, too. The rain is driving him mad; in the denial of outdoor play, he is closer to genuinely climbing the walls than anyone I’ve seen. His blood pulses like a pneumatic drill and the whirling never stops.
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Comment by: Kowalski Online- 2008-01-14 17:53
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Terrific, Rosie.
Berff |
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Good story, reading the comments i agree there is a hint or suggestion of ADHD here but nothing explicit, i like that, being able to choose for yourself.
For me this is just an active kid who needs release, my two are the same, when bored they play increasingly boisterous/borderline violent games until someone gets hurt (usually me)
Good read, will be back for more |
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Karen - thank you for revisiting. Glad you think it now works better. Thanks again for the edit.
kmorales: glad if it touched a chord. Thanks for your comment.
Thunderpen, I completely agree. 'ADHD' can be a lazy diagnosis by a physician who doesn't want to spend too long with the family, working out why the kid is so frustrated. My own 6-year-old needs at least an hour of energetic play every day, or he can't sleep at night. (At this time of year, that's almost impossible by the time he gets home from school.)
Good to hear from you - I'll visit Km's and Thunderpen's work soon, I promise! |
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Unrelated to your poem, I think too much is made of ADHD. I have a grandson that can run steadily for hours. Then he lays down for 3 minutes. Then he's back up and running again.
I believe if a kid is given the outdoors, fewer "no's", and something to explore, the ADHD would look a lot less awesome.
Your poem as edited pictures a normal child. Some kids are just active. |
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Being not to far from that age myself ... I find this absolutely charming as well as insane. I remember the days too well, and having ADHD run in my family just brings it that much closer. Great perseverance and love from the MC despite her clear distress brings it poignancy as well.
Good read. |
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