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nonalienabductee
Niccole Segura
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United States, Pennsylvania/Ohio

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Unfair Advantage

“Niccole, the floor needs to be swept.”


                “Niccole, fill up the fry buckets.”


                “Niccole, wipe down the walls.”


                “Niccole, why don’t you mop out the freezer?”


                “Niccole, take out the rugs.”


“Niccole, you need to come in.  Christine’s sick.”


                “Why hasn’t anybody cleaned this machine yet?  Niccole, you do it.”


                “Nepotism my ass,” I thought, glaring at my dad’s back.


 


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BethShanFan Comment by: BethShanFan - 2008-04-30 19:26
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Ha ha ha this is pretty funny! I just wish I knew what nepotism is but it's still funny without knowing.
JohnnySodoff Comment by: JohnnySodoff - 2008-01-22 12:53
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Hmm... I like the switcheroo you pull towards the end. Adds a little bit more, um, conversation-y-ness to it. "Do this, do this, yadaya, do this!"
Juan2 Comment by: Juan2 - 2008-01-14 17:20
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haha, I think stories like this wee one can be universally appreciated. Really like how you set it up, with all the dialogue from the dad setting up the narrator's (aka: your) punchline at the end. Couldn't help but smile at the bitterness there, sorry :)

happy writings.
celiza Comment by: celiza - 2008-01-14 03:52
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This is funny. I can actually relate to this post. Just replace your name with mine and it could be my life. Haha. Nicely done.
mynamelez Comment by: mynamelez - 2008-01-13 19:31
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It seems that Nepotism can sometimes backfire. Sounds the sort of jobs an inpsiring young apprentice may be given. There's an old saying "You don't buy a dog and do all the barking."
Clever, witty story.
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