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redtwinsis
Angela Taylor
United States, Illinois, Warrensburg

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My Eyes Only See Me

You say I’m beautiful in your eyes,
That my smile brightens the skies,
I wish I could see, what you see,
My eyes only see me,

You say my eyes twinkle like stars,
That you can’t see the scars,
I wish I could see, what you see,
My eyes only see me,

You say my lips are red, as a rose,
You say I’m the only one you chose,
I wish I could see, what you see,
My eyes only see me,


You say your love for me is strong,
That with you, I can’t go wrong,
I wish I could feel, what you feel,
My heart is broken still.

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CowgirlSerenity Comment by: CowgirlSerenity - 2008-01-13 23:40
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I so totaly tell Tony this, except for the last line and then at one time I told him that too but now you know that's not so but anyway ... Great writing...love it love it love it.....Two thumbs up....:)
redtwinsis Comment by: redtwinsis - 2008-01-13 18:35
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Thank you Champagne for your comment....I feel most Poetry if written right is just the begining of a song :)
champagne Comment by: champagne - 2008-01-13 18:29
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The more poetry I read on this site, the more I feel like I'm finding lyrics. Many of your poems could be adapted to music quite easily. This is one. It's simple in form, language and theme when combined makes it a really strong work. This is good, thanks for sharing.
chillibeani826 Comment by: chillibeani826 - 2008-01-13 14:08
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I like this one :) Mabey somday your eyes will see more....
redtwinsis Comment by: redtwinsis - 2008-01-13 12:51
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Thank you, for your comments, and Orpheus I feel like this all the time....You are so right about the meaning, feelings, and emotions behind this poem....It's like you know me :)
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