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Dante
Dante Prestipino
United States, Missouri, St. Louis

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Speed Demon (Wee Challenge #22)

The hotel room door slams. He grabs the skin between her last rib and hipbone with one hand and disrobes her with the other. She slams him against the wall and reaches into his overpriced slacks.

Turning around she puts it where she thinks he‘ll like it best. One pump, two pump, three. “Yeah Mama!”

“That’ll be $450.00, Speedy.”

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Dante Comment by: Dante - 2008-01-16 17:47
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Thanks for reading Karen. Your wee challenges are fun and I look forward to participating in the next one.
karjon Comment by: karjon - 2008-01-16 12:36
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'reaches into his overpriced slacks' - I was already laughing at that line. Great ending and a very original take on the title.

Thanks for the read and the laugh.

Cheers

Karen
Dante Comment by: Dante - 2008-01-13 22:22
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Thanks for reading everybody. I look forward to reading your work.
kmorales Comment by: kmorales - 2008-01-13 19:25
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Ouch ! I'm feeling the hits. Fantastic pacing in this one, and I adore the use of the word speedy. Get it DONE Mama.

This just leaves me with a smile on my face. Great GREAT take.
krademacher Comment by: krademacher Online- 2008-01-13 19:00
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Ha! I guess he should have gone for hourly rates, and not piece work.
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