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| I just tried to write a poem the other day with the word "circlets" in it. It didn't work for me...so I'm jealous of your use of it in this fine poem. ;) I find your word usage very unique and fresh. "his ungrabbed hair." It's one of those phrases that makes so much sense that you wonder why you never thought of it yourself. Thanks for the read! |
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Comment by: Sophia - 2008-01-17 05:49
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Wonderful imagery; it's quite unusual. I liked:
'as he rolled alone
armadillo balled
and ravenous as a crow in Lent'
in particular, but the whole poem is good. |
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Comment by: lolly - 2008-01-15 04:57
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"His ungrabbed hair
as he rolled alone"
the Lolly will grab his hair.
bring him to her. |
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| love this line: "building treasures in pleasure" |
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| Interesting:) |
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