Alien Poetry Challenge #7: The Prostitute's Story
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Alien Poetry Challenge #7: The Prostitute's Story
Bustling bodies reach under, over bright brass taps.
Rare as good house wine, in dim nooks avoid
Hustling Chinese selling ‘Fi-pound’ movies.
There, ensconced you read, unaware of sharp
Glares from hostile competition; content.
You and your cursory eyes, green/blue stars
Bared in the pit of Camden. Me, subtle
Skew on a desperate bid for favour.
Lewd remarks just wouldn’t cut the mustard.
My slick patina shrivels in your glow.
Few see beyond the red nails and net;
By pity or contrition you see deep.
Soul watcher, in a dim corner. You read
Whole paragraphs of me, and aren’t repelled.
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Rare as good house wine - indeed!
Fantastic stuff. |
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Comment by: Arley - 2008-02-07 06:24
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| Just wanted to congratulate you again, Sharon, on a great piece of work! |
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Comment by: Kowalski Online- 2008-02-07 03:42
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| Sharon, fabulous. Took me a little while to figure it out - my favorite sort of writing. You painted a marvellous picture. Congratulations on a well-deserved win! |
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Comment by: Nora Online- 2008-02-06 19:05
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I know it's a poem, but that doesn't take away from the story. I like this a lot--the rhythm, the imagery and the emotion.
I hear Fireballems re: the "cut the mustard" comment, but I think it was kind of a jump from outside her perspective to inside it.
A definite winner. |
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| Thanks Rosie - i did edit and pop the 'reach' in, to make the sense of it clearer. This was due to you fab crit - many many thanks!! x |
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