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Thunderpen
Parris ja Young
United States, Montana, Laughing Lady

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MOTHER AND MY THIRD SET OF TEETH

For a long while, while the Mantle of Grace yet wrapt my shoulders, I knew that if I really concentrated on a sea-change within my body long enough, deep enough, it would occur.

And so, counting my missing teeth, I decided to grow a third set.

I thought about it every two or three days, rolling the images about in my mind like one might pick up and finger some memento, or gaze out the window at the birds at the feeder.

I did this for three years.

Then as I slept one night, I dreamt.

From the doorway of a bedroom I looked in upon a bed, and behind the bed a window. My mother lay on the bed.

It was her, sure enough, but I was repulsed: she had two heads.

She spoke, "If you want another set of teeth, you will have to grow another head."

I gave up the project.

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lornawelsh Comment by: lornawelsh - 2008-03-05 03:49
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I love the visual aspect evoked here, it is unexpexted and humorous, i am not sure that this is flash fiction and not poetry as the lines are certainly very musical x
GarethCB Comment by: GarethCB - 2008-01-15 12:15
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I really didn't know where this was heading, but it was one hell of a ride. A terrific flash piece. Very original.
lolly Comment by: lolly - 2008-01-15 08:01
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submit it to some haughty serious site. hahahaha!
lolly Comment by: lolly - 2008-01-15 08:00
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super freakin cool! i really dig it.
the Lolly has spoken.
hahahaha!
YAY for you!
henzy Comment by: henzy - 2008-01-15 07:47
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not at all what i expected to be reading when i open this work. i throughly enjoyed it. i like your scant use of words. it's precise.
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