 |
 |
 |
| |
Two bags and your reason why.
the first thing you do is
brush your teeth.
At least that way, in the bathroom,
you get a sense of things.
You can't avoid the forced image
of reflection and hang over,
of stiff hands and bruised vocal chords,
of soggy ivory and stale tongue.
Swallow that meat in your mouth son,
It does you no good.
you don't remember preaching son,
but your knees burn.
Know who should be praying
and why she can still be sleeping.
It still won't save you
but you were never serious
about leaving.
Want to comment on this Poetry?
Sign up to Edit Red and you will be able to comment on Poetry and get access to: Upload your own stories and poems, get readers and their feedback, promote your work...
|
 |
|
[Back to top]
|
|
 |
Comment by: bbones - 2008-01-17 12:47
|
|
| Beautifully written. There is something about it -- I don't want to say it's powerful, because it's something entirely different -- that knots your throat in a way. It makes you think. |
 |
Comment by: Sophia - 2008-01-16 07:22
|
|
I agree this is powerful, reflective as well. The opening is a scene you can visualise, and then these lines:
'Swallow that meat in your mouth son,
It does you no good.
you don't remember preaching son,
but your knees burn.
Know who should be praying
and why she can still be sleeping.'
really grab attention and make the reader think about who is being addressed and why, and the end wraps it up perfectly. |
|
|
| Very powerful. I really enjoyed this. |
| 1 |
|
 |
 |
 |
|
|