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luminous5
Olumide Oderinde
Nigeria, Lagos, Victoria Island

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Once upon a time
At the dawn of life
When here was empty space
And paths were just beginning

There was assigned to us
A possibility of infinite limits
A chance of endless boundaries
A freedom of zero gravity

We conquered heights
And sailed depths
We discovered fire
And overcame space

If we had altered our course
When it was harder than the cause
If we were bothered by the cold
When we gathered for the gold

You would have an ocean of fear to cross

Now you arrive to a timely era

We have done the past

You can do the future

GO NOW

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BrianNew Comment by: BrianNew - 2008-01-16 13:00
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Simple language, clean imagery, rich thought. Brilliant.
Sara123 Comment by: Sara123 - 2008-01-16 09:30
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I enjoyed this piece. You have talent, and you have unique style. Using irregular stanzas can sometimes make a poem loose its flow, but I think you used the change in this to help express the feeling behind it, and it gave the poem more meaning. This is great work!
Nanook Comment by: Nanook - 2008-01-16 08:02
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Very nice and quite thoroughly inspirational, really. I wouldn't go with the capitals at the second to last line-- italicize it, maybe?
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