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bloomingwood
kelsey osborne
Canada, Thorold

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Searching For You

It was a night of rain and clouded skies. A night when mists hung low in corners where willows huddled in hushed conversation, their heads bowing close and low. Water dripped from leaves, from gutters, slithered down window screens to come together in puddles where worms would rest. Everything was silent, and I was missing you.

I looked down, only to notice the reflection of your face staring back at me. I could feel a tear running down my cheek, and I wiped it away with the back of my hand. I lifted my head, and walked on.

Every puddle I splashed through spoke softly of the next time we'll meet. Every rustle of leaves that brought a shower down upon my head whispered the echo of your laugh. Your voice was running down the sidewalk, begging me to follow its winding path in the darkness. And I searched for you.

I was looking hurriedly, trying to find you fast, because the darkness was getting thicker, but somehow my shadow still followed me. Scared now, every so often I would feel like giving up and to just go home. "What home?" I asked myself.' you're the reason I got out of bed in the morning, the reason I would ever go home".

I know that you were somewhere near me, maybe only an arms reach away. You were there to help me rid of the darkness.

Beneath the floppy branches, heavy with water, I looked. I followed footprints left in the muddy ground hoping that they were yours. All night I hunted for you under the starless sky, the rain never stopping, always falling, falling.

I could feel it landing on my bare skin, wishing I were a jacket. But that was less important than me finding you. My eyelids were getting heavy, and I tried to fight off the exhaustion. Then I gave in. I slept, and dreamed;

There was a sound of running water in the distance. That somehow found a way into my sleep. I walked around, and around again. Near the black water with both spiders and snakes deep under it's surface. As I walked ,it seemed that the grass was reaching for my ankles. Then a new sound was heard. Long, low sounds, branches rustling and trees being bent. But I still heard you calling in the night. Then I awoke.

The morning found me lost under the soggy willow tree, seeking out your hand to lead me home. As I brushed past the limp leaves into the first rays of sunlight, I realized with a smile that you never really left me at all. The night had been gloomy with rain clouds and doubt, but now morning was here, and our love was still in the breeze.

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brokenpoet Comment by: brokenpoet - 2007-11-29 00:29
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Wow, that was amazing. I got completely lost in your writing here, and the imagery was amazing. This conveyed your emotions in a kind of ethereal way, and you did a really wonderful job. Keep up your writing!
MitchellNoel Comment by: MitchellNoel - 2007-05-02 01:19
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Yeah i could really feel that one. you set the mood perfectly. i'm always saying things are better in the morning, and here you have expressed that so well. look forward to more.
awesome Comment by: awesome - 2007-04-20 11:43
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Very beautiful! It was dreamlike, and it flowed very well. I like it a lot! Keep up the writing!
bloomingwood Comment by: bloomingwood - 2007-03-23 06:27
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I really appreciate it you guys. The comments mean a lot to me.

Wow, I'm sorry I haven't been on the site for a while. I'll be posting some new stuff up soon. Just so you know - I'm thirteen now =P

Thank you everyone.
ally19ky Comment by: ally19ky - 2007-03-22 16:03
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very dreamlike and surreal. at certain points, this story takes a chilling effect. What I got from this story was the idea that love transcends time and reality; even when our loved ones aren't with us, they are in the vague trigger of a memory or the way the wind blows. Beautiful story, especially for someone so young. you are definetely a natural born writer!
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