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tanka ( maybe that's time)
I think it is time,
maybe time wants it,
yes, time indeed wants it.
Goodbye cries, goodbye sorrows and pains,
that's time to go back to life.
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| i appreciate your kinds advices...that's true. maybe i try next time. |
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Comment by: Arley - 2008-01-28 07:06
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| I like the poem, Joanna, but the scheme is off. The 2nd line is 5 instead of 7. 3rd line is 6 instead of the required 5, etc. |
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Comment by: - 2008-01-21 06:47
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| Great try. It was simple but your point was made clear and came across. Lovely poem and so true. |
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| i will be please with all types of comments because sincerely it is the first time i come across such type of poetry... |
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