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MsWizard
Alicia Wizard
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United States, WA, Seattle

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Immortal Kiss (Revised)

Oh come to me with blood lust
Driven, hungry desires~

Let my woman scented charms
Stoke and inflame your
Simmering, blood thirsty fires~

Let your hungry mouth bury
Deep into this fleshly feast
As you partake and savor
That which you yearn for …
Burn for ~

Lay me out bare, a willing player
In this game of life or death~

Indulge yourself in this
Silken sensual banquet,
Aromatic and delicately
Seasoned for your
Discriminating palate~

Quench your thirst deeply,
Caress me hotly,
Sweetly,
Drink from me
My honeyed nectar flowing
From this golden chalice~

Bring me shuddering near
To the deep deathly abyss,
As my eyes softly close
In a warm dreamlike bliss~

Mesmerize me,
I will call you my Master,
Brand me as yours,
Suckle me faster …
Harder … deeper,
Bleed me … need me~

Satisfy that
Impassioned urge,
Gorge yourself and
Feel the surge of
Red hot sparked life blood
Flowing
From flesh milky white
Engulfing, washing
Over you in warm
Sensual waves of delight~

Your body shudders,
Trembling
In consummate,
Exquisite bliss~

Now rise from me,
Infused, renewed,
By this …

… Our Immortal Kiss …

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MsWizard Comment by: MsWizard Online- 2008-07-20 19:20
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Thank you for reading and commenting Patrick.....This one is a little more stylialized than my norm, I know, but it was a fun one to write regardless....
patrickfinley Comment by: patrickfinley - 2008-07-20 05:46
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this is a very fluid piece, i really enjoyed reading it. i like your use of line breaks, and your word choice appeared carefully chosen, and well chosen at that. thanks for writing and sharing this piece, patrick.
skypoetone Comment by: skypoetone Online- 2008-07-18 09:47
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These dark and sultry erotic poems deserve to be shared by a greater audience. Are you sure no-one's biting your hand, never mind your neck A? :)
MsWizard Comment by: MsWizard Online- 2008-04-12 08:09
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Yes...yet another challenge to write a "dark sultry vampirerotica" piece...Glad you enjoyed this one....I had fun writing it...
mattarnold Comment by: mattarnold - 2008-04-12 08:06
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woman offering herself up to vampire?

Like much of your poetry, this one pounds harder and harder w/ each line w/ a cool ending. I like the use of ... ... to break up the last line. You've done that in other poems before and it is very effective voice. Makes me pause before savoring the last words.
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