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Ria
Ria Kennedy
United States, CA

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Mother’s Fault

He kicked in the door and swept the gun across the Stygian darkness. Nothing. No, wait. Was that the sound of talons clattering across the wooden floor? And was that a sort of snuffling?

It was. Glen took a step in and fired. The creature screamed.

Then there was a roar and it burst out of the darkness all bloody and enraged, large jaws yawning wider than Glen’s head, ready to bite, to kill.

Glen fired again.

The creature went down from the shotgun blast and began mewling pathetically.

“No,” it bawled in barely understandable words, “Don’t kill me.”

“Did you or didn’t you kill all of Farmer Ted’s sheep?”

“Yes, but I was hungry.”

“Then why shouldn’t I kill you? Wasn’t the village feeding you proper on a regular schedule?”

“Yes, but I couldn’t stop myself. It was my mother’s fault, she didn’t love me enough.” And then, in a self-pitying voice, “I was lonesome.”

“And if I let you live, what then?”

“I’ll help you find many many riches. I have a nose for gold and precious gems.”

“Hmmm,” Glen said. After a moment, he shifted the gun toward the ceiling. “You know I don’t like my mother either. Let’s get you patched up.”

The creature gave a pitiful sob and heaved itself up from where it had prostrated itself.

Glen, disgusted with its wailing as it looked over its blood-speckled hide, looked away. He noticed the shot-riddled wall and took a moment to examine it.

His attention became riveted upon a large foot-long splinter and he reached out to pull it away, unaware that the creature stood behind him, its eyes flaring red.

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troyarn Comment by: troyarn - 2008-04-18 15:48
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Very good short! I have to admit I enjoyed it very much...especially the ending. I am looking forward to reading more of your works.
Ria Comment by: Ria - 2008-02-10 21:28
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Hi Margy, thanks for the kind words. I'm not planning to continue this story at this time, but it was fun to write.
bostonmargy Comment by: bostonmargy - 2008-02-10 17:10
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Good one, with an ending I wasn't expecting. You turned a few of my expectations on their heads, which is always a good thing. I wasn't expecting the creature to be self-pitying. That was interesting. Will you be continuing this story? I hope so!
Ria Comment by: Ria - 2008-02-01 07:53
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Thank you GL Ward!
GLWard Comment by: GLWard - 2008-01-31 20:28
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Love the ending on this one. Not what I was expecting. Nice job.

Got nothing else to add, really.
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