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redtwinsis
Angela Taylor
United States, Illinois, Warrensburg

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True Love

If the sky fell tonight,
I would know in the rubble and the mess,
I would find you, our love will see it through,
Even if it’s just me and you,
Sometimes life gets hard, I know,
Sometimes I wish I could just die,
But one thing keeps me going,
Knowing you are alive,
If the wind blew the world apart,
I would find it in my heart,
To find you in the heavenly skies above,
Because not even death can part true love.

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redtwinsis Comment by: redtwinsis - 2008-01-27 18:16
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the commas...hummmm They are there because I have written poetry for a long time and well I have always written poetry with commas after every line that is how I was taught to do it when I was young....That is also how I have always read poetry...thank you for your comment though
Fireballems Comment by: Fireballems - 2008-01-27 18:05
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i like it. Took time to realize it rhymed, perhaps it is the formatting and the abundance of misplaced commas. They just take away from the great idea that this poem is.
redtwinsis Comment by: redtwinsis - 2008-01-23 17:38
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thank you I have a lot more that arent on here I have too many to post thank you for your comment :)
DavidHe Comment by: DavidHe - 2008-01-23 17:35
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Hi, you write very good poems! I have read all of them but I want to read them again! Emotional, concise, well-rhymed! You are so talented! Great!
redtwinsis Comment by: redtwinsis - 2008-01-23 10:02
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Thank you for the comment, the way I had it on here when I first posted it was pretty bad and it hurt my eyes; when I went through it...LOL....So I changed it to this....I'm glad you like the poem :)
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