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Fall of the Man: Alien Challenge #8

There you go shirking
conscientious manners, swayed
by your own self doubt.
You wallow in lost ego
like paper boots in a storm.

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Comment by: CrackaZach - 2008-01-29 20:07

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I'm likin' this new loaded brevity gig yer sportin'

Comment by: Arley - 2008-01-28 07:15

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Okay, okay so I’m shirking again. Do you have to rub it in? Dandy poem, Sharon, I like “paper boots” too!

Comment by: Dante - 2008-01-27 20:11

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Great write. "Like paper boots in a storm" was a simple yet profound ending. Really liked it, D.

Comment by: alien - 2008-01-27 07:52

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It's good - intense. Paper boots actually made me laugh. I was wondering whether paper boats might work better?

Comment by: easywriter58 - 2008-01-25 14:18

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Quite an unusual poem but it works. Lots of metaphores to make one think.

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