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nurseytonya
Tonya Lambert Bryant
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Mother's Fault

Pryscilla sat silently looking out of the window as her mother drove her home from the Little Miss American Princess pageant. She had smiled her prettiest, walked as she had learned in modelling class, and tried to appear smart as well as cute and charming in the on-stage interview. All those months of work, and she still came home with the first runner-up trophy while Missy Valentina got the tiara.
She waited, hoping her mom would give words of encouragement, "We'll get it next year" or "First runner-up out of all those girls is still a great accomplishment" perhaps.
Instead her mom heaved a sigh. "You rushed across the stage during evening gown. That's probably why you didn't win. Now all that money is wasted." Pryscilla hung her head.
At home she looked in the mirror, preparing to wash off her makeup, and Pryscilla realized that despite the expertly applied makeup and hair done by the best stylist, she felt uglier than ever.

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Kowalski Comment by: Kowalski - 2008-01-26 21:38
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This is quite poignant, Tonya. No crits, just praise.

Bill
Audiogeist Comment by: Audiogeist - 2008-01-25 06:41
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'and Pryscilla realized that despite the expertly applied makeup and hair done by the best stylist, she felt uglier than ever.' - heart breaking!
poetress411 Comment by: poetress411 - 2008-01-25 01:11
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Awesome read. I loved the ending. "Uglier than ever" really captures the girls voice
Stratus Comment by: Stratus - 2008-01-24 10:28
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Good read, very realistic ending. This sounded so like something that really happens, the mothers attitude coming out as she tries to relive through her daughter that which she probably hadn't ever achieved.

Nice Work-
mynamelez Comment by: mynamelez - 2008-01-23 21:34
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It would have been interesting to have added a subtext on the Mother's less than beautiful attributes. One cannot help the way one looks and sometimes no amount of makeup will hide the true self.
So sad that Prysilla was denied the encouragement she deserved.

Great flash etc.
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