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Dante
Dante Prestipino
United States, Missouri, St. Louis

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Everywhere she looked she saw silver (Karjon's wee challenge #24)

Everywhere she looked she saw silver, as she leaned in for that unforgettable kiss. The movie theater was dark, but the beam from the projector was in direct line with Jimmy’s mouth. The light reflected off his braces with such intensity that it appeared as though a truck pulled into the theater and shined their brights on the crowd.

“Close your goddamn mouth, kid!” the grumpy grandpa shouted from across the room.

Jimmy didn’t pay his hecklers any mind. Neither did his date, Audrey. Jimmy inched in and puckered his lips in a way as to push them out ahead of his braces. Audrey did the same, figuring that if the steel made contact with her lips, it would cushion a potentially devastating blow to her teeth.

Their lips met, on that dreamy teenage night. Every worry in their young minds escaped for the duration of that kiss. Audrey pulled her head back and giggled. Jimmy’s head stayed completely still. As he opened his eyes, he smiled. Everywhere she looked she saw silver.

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karjon Comment by: karjon - 2008-01-28 12:22
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Aw - a very sweet ending, but a wee story filled with humour.

Thanks for another good read,Dante.

Cheers

Karen
Ria Comment by: Ria - 2008-01-28 09:50
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Love it! Kick ass!
Arley Comment by: Arley - 2008-01-26 10:36
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Great piece here, Dante! You put me right in that theater and did an excellent job showing the mood of those kids.
Chris Millar Comment by: Chris Millar - 2008-01-25 08:39
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Nice take on the theme, enjoyed the heckling grandpa.
Audiogeist Comment by: Audiogeist - 2008-01-25 06:50
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**Sigh**

What a lovely image! Very sweet and endearing, and at the same time quirky - loved it!
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