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| I would write more for friends than for strangers. |
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| Please bear in mind that I am not a poetry orientated bod, so the following question is sincere: are all the mis-spellings (typos?) and grammatical errors intentional, i.e, is this what they call "poetic licence" and meant to reflect the angry/frustration of the poet? You sound like "an angry young man"... |
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| I do not like the end it gets very weird and I agree with kerosene this poem needs a little more spice it just doesn't sound right it's very well weird really |
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I dont know if the cliches were written on purpose, but I'd try to change that to give the poem a little more spice. Readers like myself like to read new things.
The flow of the poem works fine, just some tweaking would make it better.
john |
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| I like this...it makes me think :) |
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