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dreamer
Suzanne Paton
Canada, Ontario, in the woods somewhere

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The Shadowlands

First draft and it still needs work, but would love your impressions.

 

Shhh!

Talk quietly,

lean in,

bend an ear.

If we whisper,

They won’t be able to hear.

Now,

I want to tell you,

I want to but I can’t tell you,

you wouldn’t believe me.

You wouldn’t understand,

They have been after me for so long

I almost can’t even remember

when They weren’t there.

The things They have done to me!

Things you wouldn’t believe.

Look

Look!

I have the scars to prove it.

 

He pulls his shirt above his head

pointing,

eyes frantically pleading.

 

I don’t want to scare you,

but They are everywhere.

You need to be careful,

They are everywhere.

The things I could tell you,

you wouldn’t believe.

Let me tell you,

they have stopped me,

stopped me from

succeeding

from graduating

you know,

from getting a job.

People have pretended

to be my friend,

but really it’s Them.

Believe me.

You’ve got to believe me.

 

Shhh!

 

Now listen,

I need you

to call this number

 

Paper is passed

under the table,

reluctant hand accepts

and folds it

disappearing

in jean pocket.

 

Just call.

Say it’s from me.

Don’t tell them where I am,

they’ll know what to do.

 

Eyes widen,

as he sits up straight

although nothing happened

awkwardly holding his head high.

 

Here They come.

Don’t tell Them.

They are in on it too,

They are all in on it.

What I’ve told you...

no one can be trusted.

No one!

you understand...

 

no one

 

he whispers

the last bit

a secret.

 

I see the woman coming over,

my time is up.

 

“I love you”

I say

 

For a moment

his eyes become still

he sees me

more frightened by those words

than by the “Them” after him.

 

I reach over,

he flinches

almost surprised

he forces himself to stay

still, under the

gentle touch.

 

It’s going to be all right.

Don’t you worry

sister.

I’ll always look after you.

 

Warm smile

so achingly familiar

brightens his face,

before it fades

a fallen star

gone.

 

The woman comes over.

It is time to go.

 

“I love You”

 

He doesn’t hear me.

I walk away,

relieved to be leaving

but I look over my shoulder

at the large form now small

sitting at the plastic table

 

alone

lost

 

and I leave.

 

Outside,

I take the piece of paper

hesitantly opening

hoping against hope.

 

Can I believe?

How can I not?

 

Illegible scribbles

blare

lost in the white space

of nothing.

 

I place it in the trash can.

 


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Ithiya Comment by: Ithiya - 2008-01-29 12:12
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Heartbreaking, is the word I'd use... And captured well.
ParchmentPoetry Comment by: ParchmentPoetry - 2008-01-27 07:38
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COOL! Makes ya wonder: aliens, mob, hospital staff, etc. Just COOL. J
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