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Breathe
blowing me with the rimless caress of the wind
under the weeping willow
no shoes
no pain
no depth
I'm just there
watching the grass sway
and the beating of the sun
dance
inside of me
motionless I can be
in a place that no one could touch
nor remember
to forget
a timeless spot
of eternity
where I breathe no air
yet am filled with a life
or death
that I never knew existed
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| This poem gave me a really calm and relaxing feeling. Reminds me of some meditative experiences that I've had, especially the ending. Very nice description. |
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Comment by: - 2006-10-13 14:19
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| Hi! Wow I liked this, very vivid description of a feeling. This makes you feel really calm and I really enjoy how you use words so effectively. |
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| Beautifully visual. You have a real way with words, but I'm sure you don't need me to tell you that! |
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Comment by: Min - 2006-03-30 10:25
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| Very nice. Switched a bit between tenses that spoiled the flow for me. |
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Comment by: - 2006-03-30 07:58
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| I think this is really beautiful. But I'm not any good with poetry, so I have no idea what it means. Lol. I'll read more. Lee |
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