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Kowalski
Bill Kowalski
United States, missouri, st. louis

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Delivery in Four to Six Weeks (Karen's Wee Challenge #24)

John held his breath as he opened the box… Every day he’d checked the mailbox, crestfallen to see it wasn’t there. Until brilliant, glorious today. He’d snatched it up and run to the kitchen table.

Having been previously let down by burgeoning anticipation, he was aware of possible disappointment once he dared to reveal the contents. As the light blessed the object of his abundant desire, however, his chest flushed with sweet, golden satisfaction.

The “Cap’n Crunch Pirate Treasure Chest Cereal Bowl and Matching Shovel Spoon” was a work of art in light-brown wood-grained plastic. He ran to rattle some cereal into it and try it out.

His mom had helped him clip, save and mail in the box tops, and although the box said “delivery in four to six weeks”, he’d waited the full six.

At least the first time, forty-three years ago. This time: Mastercard, PayPal, one week.

“God bless you, Ebay”, he thought, warmed by cold milk and crunchy cereal in a familiar treasure chest bowl.

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karjon Comment by: karjon - 2008-01-29 07:35
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Haha - excellent, Bill. Aw, it's so sweet too - well done.

Cheers

Karen
Ria Comment by: Ria - 2008-01-28 10:09
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So true. Loved it!
LouiseKay Comment by: LouiseKay Online- 2008-01-28 08:31
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LOL! This is me! Used to clip those boxtops and save those pennies to add up to the $1.99 for SH&H. And now, the internet and E-bay can find and bring those same objects in a much shorter time. I still have a few boxes of such keepsakes in storage. This was great. Nice nostalgia piece. :)
kmorales Comment by: kmorales - 2008-01-27 11:52
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How wonderful this sounds. I love the idea of the time differences between the two incidents and the two snapshots of first and second time receiving the treasure. Very creative take and enjoyed reading it immensely.

thanks for the read.
Kowalski Comment by: Kowalski - 2008-01-26 13:33
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Thanks Arley. I think very highly of Louise's writing - like I do yours - so I value her crits as much as the compliments.
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