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Kowalski
Bill Kowalski
United States, missouri, st. louis

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The Bohemian (Karen's Wee Challenge #24)

Everywhere she looked she saw silver. Silver hair, silver wheelchairs, silver trays of medications. Not the place she wished to be. “These are old people”, Irene thought, looking at her wrinkled little hand. But planted there by circumstances – an icy sidewalk, a shaky cane, a fragile hip- there she sat.

Omaha was where she’d settled with Otto. They were the first of their sort in that cow town, she remembered with a smile. Bohemians. Now nobody even knew what Bohemian meant. When Irene was young, Bohemians squirreled themselves away in old buildings, waited tables, penned poetry during breaks. People who thought of themselves as Bohemian these days worked for ad agencies and lived in expensive lofts, decorated with sleek furniture.

Her one joy, now that Otto was a fading memory, was Sunflower. Their only child. Sunflower was fifty-ish now. She brought San Diego warmth with her twice a year. And always a gift – a few airline bottles of booze and a little weed. This year, wrapped in silver paper.

Now, Sunflower, she was Bohemian.

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karjon Comment by: karjon Online- 2008-01-29 07:37
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Another cracker, Bill. I love the description of old v. new bohemians - very astute.

Thanks, as always, for a great story.

Cheers

Karen
LouiseKay Comment by: LouiseKay - 2008-01-28 08:27
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Great descriptions. The juxtaposition in the second paragraph of what the 'true' meaning versus what a modern version of bohemian means adds a nice flavor. Not just reminiscing, but a sharp-eyed, lucid comparison. Our narrator may be in an old folks home, but she's still got her wits about her. You give us a huge insight into this person in a short piece. Excellent!
Kowalski Comment by: Kowalski - 2008-01-26 13:48
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Thanks, Violet. Fake silver or real, old ladies can be awesome. I've known a few great ones.

Love your name, incidentally.
jauhar Comment by: jauhar - 2008-01-26 13:36
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May be silver is a sign of old age in some parts of the world but in others its a blast. I live in Madinah and women go to the Salon to get streeks of silver placed into their hair.
Never the less great job
Arley Comment by: Arley - 2008-01-26 10:23
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Dandy, Bill! You have a real talent for showing the plight of the aged. I like that the poor old MC got a little (I’m betting it was Acapulco Gold) joy at the end, heh heh.
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