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Of Our Moment
And do tell me of your troubles
said the sun to the world
and like blodied ruble
the agony unfurled
It rang out through the stars
the worst of bitter screams
and made a worping mar
of the moons most tranquiel seas
It crashed and reawakened
for the secound of its time
all the novas taken
in their millisecound chimes
And if you could have seen it
for the planets eyes they closed
then the most morbid of the merits
,knowing you have chose
Yet when it all was over
and the universe let rest
The sun said what of that whisper
the word human i heard best
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Comment by: jesscat - 2008-02-18 12:10
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Wow.
your poetry is AMAZING. Once again, I love it, because of the symbolism and interpretations you can find. I don't know if you meant to do this, and I do not know if you are religious or anything, but I was reminded that the Sun is often Symbolic for the Son, or Christ. Which fit so well, because he is the one who has experienced all the horror of our earth, so much that he bled from every pore.
anyways, thats my interpretation.
but please read my poetry and tell me what you think. :) |
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Comment by: Dakota - 2008-01-28 09:48
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Fantastic - really. I was caught in your web of beauty and rhyme. Beautiful poem, truly.I would like to be one of your readers please? One for my library.
Maybe worth going over some of the words - some typos (I think - unless i'm missing something)...x |
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