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BabyKiller
Mark Phillips
United States, North Carolina, Raleigh

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A Recipe for Disaster

BOOM!
BANG!
CRASH!

Pots and pans mix the primordial soup.

Beings roam the globe,
slurping
and
slouching
when needed.

BOOM!
BANG!
CRASH!

Oh well, we hardly knew ye’.

Dinosaurs march the planet.
Dinosaurs develop,
Mature,
Command.

BOOM!
BANG!
CRASH!

They’re gone now, too.

Mammals come forth
tail lost,
follicles shed,
thumb opposable.

BOOM!
BANG!
CRASH!

Man is made.

BOOM!
BANG!
CRASH!

More Men are made.

Man treads his grounds,
Man develops,
Matures,
Advances...
Oops, too far.

Now Man argues with himself
Calls himself names.

BOOM!
BANG!
CRASH!

It’s a war out there!

Pots and pans mix the progressive soup.

BOOM!
BANG!
CRASH!

It’ll be done, soon.

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TaylorP Comment by: TaylorP - 2008-01-28 09:59
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Great poem. I definitely like your style. Favorite line: "Oops, too far" followed closely by "It's war out there!"
prolixphantasm Comment by: prolixphantasm - 2008-01-27 06:58
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Very nice. I liked the repeat of BOOM BANG CRASH. I almost wanted the last line to be "Oh well, we hardly knew ye" but I like your last line as well. I also really liked the "oops, too far"

I typically hate poetry but this was really cool and I loved the commentary you were making. You kept it simple and direct.
updownleftright Comment by: updownleftright - 2008-01-25 19:31
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Nice, but what about jesus? ;)
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