Roselyn's Silver Wee Story 24
Everywhere she looked she saw silver linings. Rainy mornings secured timeout in front of a crackling fire. Sunny afternoons meant relaxation, serenaded by sweet twittering. Car trouble afforded her well-needed exercise, while a sound engine provided comfortable transport.
Roselyn searched for positives in everyone. She shunned the pretentiously popular, preferring the company of the socially inept. Slander just went in one ear and out the other.
Nothing seemed to faze her and she somehow found a glimmer of light in the darkest of tunnels. She rejoiced at the new found freedom that her redundancy provided and welcomed the change of location after that unscrupulous landlord evicted her two days before Christmas.
Misplaced trust proved her eventual downfall one evening, when she invited the injured stranger in so he could phone emergency services.
CSIs dusted the crime scene for prints as the funeral directors drove the hapless victim back to the parlor, where they lined a mahogany casket.
Everywhere she looked she saw silver linings.
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Comment by: GLWard - 2008-01-30 23:23
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I have to agree- poor Roselyn!
Very well done. I really have nothing to add, though. |
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Comment by: karjon Online- 2008-01-29 08:13
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I love the way you bring us full circle with the beginning and end lines - excellent.
I could make the usual 'too much tell' moan, but that can be a problem in all Wee Stories, and sometimes you get away with it - I think you get away with it here.
I'm with Karl on CSIs - definietly no apostrophe, in my opinion.
Thanks for the read - good story.
Cheers
karen |
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Great. My Crits:
Roselyn searched for positives in everyone.
Change this. Please. Maybe,
Roselyn wanted to see the good in everyone.
Also, it ends quite sharply. Very fast. She's so great, then she's so dead.
I have the same problem too. Its ok.
I liked it. |
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Comment by: Ria - 2008-01-28 10:25
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| Wow, I think this is a great story. Poor woman! |
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Comment by: - 2008-01-26 22:10
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Life lesson learned the hard way, eh, Lez? Poor Roselyn, some reward for being such a positive person, I'd say! Very entertaining, disturbingly so.
//Nothing seemed to phase her// "faze" is the word you want here |
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